It happens again

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When mum and dad would go out me and my girlfriend looked after my 2 twin sisters

Mom and dad would take off on Friday night to go play at the casino and I had to look after my 2 twin sisters Amy and Stephen they were only 11 years old and I’m 29.
Everyone calls Me MB and I play basketball for the sharks in our community

Mum and dad left and about 30 minutes ago and I received a call from my little girlfriend Cristina , she was only 17
And I told her to come around that night so she did and I jumped in the shower and washed up because I wanted to play around with her when she got to my place

I was having my shower and I left the bathroom door open a little by accident but as I was looking at the door open a little bit I seen the shape of of a head looking between the gap of the door and I seen my little sister looking at me and I noticed her hand down in her underwear and she was playing with her self and she noticed that I seen her and she quickly walked away the there was a knock at the front door and it was my Cristina but yelled out to my sister’s can you let Cristina in and yelled I’m just drying myself off I’ll be down in a second ok.

To be considered episode 1

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  • Reply A. ID:5u1d7cg49j

    Longer, better details and this would be an ok start

  • Reply Hellish ID:3057hetqra

    Remember to use quotations for dialogue. Seriously. It helps hell of a lot. Other than that, make it a bit longer (500+ words) and you have a solid story.